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Well the time has come for the winner(s) to be announced.
in third place was "Summerfrost" with 25 points. Here is the entry:
| Quote: | Little baby
There you are, little baby
Delicate and small
As you lie here on my arm
You will be my little charm
Made out of passion
Born out of love
This man is you father
Beautiful and strong
We will always be there for you,
We will catch you when you fall
You father and I
We’ll love you true
We’ll always be on your side
And have a place for you to hide
We are there in the good times and the bad
And sheer you up when you feel sad
There you are little baby,
Delicate and small
Welcome to the world. |
In second place is "Sir Leopold" with 26 points. Here is the entry:
| Quote: | The Battle of Kensyu
Scene 1
Characters: Captain Tierone, General Vorsen, and Messenger Gillper.
(Captain Tierone and General Vorsen stand in a metal room with high-tec machines and computer screens around them, in the centre is a metal desk with a small keyboard on it, they walk over to the desk and General Vorsen presses a few buttons, a map of a battlefield becomes 3D above the desk, it shows a castle and a river in front of it.)
T: Vorsen, is battle will be difficult.
V: I know that captain, but if (He points to the castle on the 3D map.) Captain Shisken is killed quickly we will win for sure.
T: I see what you mean, but (He points to the river on the 3D map.) if Captain Shisken blocks all routes across that river it will be hard to reach him.
V: let’s hope that no men will be there.
T: Yes, let’s hope.
(Messenger Gillper runs in through an automatic metal door, he bows before Captain Tierone .)
G: Captain Shisken has mobilised his troops, you must be quick!
V: Fine. (His right arm becomes a machine gun.) Let’s be off.
T: Of course. (His right arm becomes a small pistol.) To war!
Scene 2
Characters: Captain Tierone, General Vorsen, and Messenger Cesspick.
(Captain Tierone and General Vorsen are each floating on three foot square platforms that are about five foot from the ground, they are on a metal field where the trees are chrome, the clouds are copper, and the sun is made of soft iron.)
T: Charge them.
V: Of course sir. (He waves his machine gun arm in the air and points it in the direction of the enemy.) CHARGE! (He charges forward on his platform and an army of metal robots run after him.)
(Messenger Cesspick runs to Captain Tierone and bows before him.)
C: Sir, the river is heavily guarded!
T: I care not for Captain Shisken’s defence, Vorsen will destroy it and bring me victory.
Scene 3
Characters: Captain Shisken, and Lady Shisken.
(Captain Shisken and Lady Shisken are both on the floating platforms in a metal room about the size of a football pitch.)
S: You know you don’t have to fight?
L: I just want to.
S: Are you sure? You could die.
L: So could you.
S: But you are so important to me.
L: You are so important to me, but we cannot lose when General Rightsin has control of the river.
S: Ahhh, yes, General Rightsin, we will win for sure. (He smiles.)
Scene 4
Characters: General Rightsin, and Ninja Hongo.
(General Rightsin is on a floating platform by a river made of molten steel, the rest of the scenery is most like that of scene 2, Ninja Hongo stands beside him.)
R: I need you to sneak up to Captain Tierone and kill him.
H: Of course.
R: With the captain dead, and me killing Vorsen, they will have nothing left and we’ll control Kensyu forever.
H: Okay. (He disappears.)
Scene 5
Characters: General Vorsen, and General Rightsin.
(General Vorsen is on his platform and he comes to within view of General Rightsin.)
V: They have the river pull back!
R: CHARGE! (The robots of General Rightsin charge General Vorsen and there is no time for General Vorsen to retreat, he must fight, the armies of robots clash and General Vorsen and General Rightsin fly into the air and begin to fight, Vorsen uses his machine gun to hit Rightsin’s chain ball.)
V: Give up, Kensyu belongs to the army of Tierone.
R: You think you will win.
(Rightsin pulls Vorsen back, the chain ball becomes straight, aimed at Vorsen, the ball shoots off and hits Vorsen, it explodes, killing Vorsen.)
R: Ha, ha, ha! I’ll inform Captain Shisken! (He flies off as the robots of Vorsen flee.)
Scene 6
Characters: Captain Tierone, Messenger Liebla, and Ninja Hongo.
(Tierone is on his platform, Messenger Liebla comes to him and bows.)
L: Sir, Vorsen has been killed.
T: Drat. I hoped he would survive the battle at that river.
L: Ahhh! (A scream of pain. The Messenger falls to the metal floor, a 12 inch cut in his back, blood pours from it. )
T: Who did that?! (His platform jerks and blows up, he falls to the floor and gets up.) Who did that, I demand to know?!
H: (Out of vision.) Me.
T: Who said that?!
H: (Appearing a few feet in front of Captain Tierone.) It was me, and my weapon. (He holds up his right hand, from each finger extends a 12 inch long blue claw.) My plasma claw.
T: I’ll kill you. (He points his pistol at Hongo, out of the pistol small, thin wire rods produce new weapons, a small chainsaw, another small pistol, a machine gun, a knife, and an axe.)
H: Is that it? (He disappears.)
T: Not again?
(Tierone’s weapon begins to fall apart as each extra weapon is cut off, the pistol is sliced in half and suddenly a blue claw comes through Tierone’s head, he falls to the floor, dead, and Ninja Hongo is behind him, blood on his middle finger’s claw. He disappears.)
Scene 7
Characters: General Rightsin, Ninja Hongo, Captain Shisken, and Lady Shisken.
(Captain Shisken and Lady Shisken stand on their platforms in the same place they were in in scene 3, General Rightsin comes into the room on his platform.)
R: Sir, Vorsen is dead, his soldiers are retreating.
S: Very good work.
(Ninja Hongo appears in the room.)
H: Sir, Captain Tierone has been killed.
S: Well done. Kensyu is mine. (He smiles.)
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and finally in 1st place is "Me" with a huge 27 points. Here is the entry.
| Quote: | The sun melted into the horizon as the moon was just visible from the opposite side of the ship. The sails created looming shadows against the orange of the wood, which radiated with warmth.
The few remnants of food and crockery were scattered on the deck. The Straw Hat pirates sat around a large crate of rum, each sporting a bemused look on their faces.
Sanji reached for another cigarette, Luffy watching him. "What does that actually taste like, Sanji?"
Sanji inhaled as he lit the tobacco. "You wouldn't like it," he stated as he blew out a cloud of smoke. "It's got a very distinctive taste."
Luffy pulled a face, the kind of face a child pulls when they're told No more ice cream, or We have to go home now.
Nami took another gulp of her rum, and wiped her mouth with the back of her hand. "No, you wouldn't like it, Luffy. It burns your throat, and leaves your tongue feeling fluffy."
Sanji turned to look at Nami, shortly followed by Usopp who stared with disbelief. "You've smoked, Nami-san? A woman with your beautiful appearance shouldn't burden it with cigarettes." She laughed as she finished off the rum.
"I only did it a few times. Nojiko used to steal them from Bellemere and we'd smoke them on the beach. I hated it, but did it so Nojiko wouldn't laugh at me." Luffy looked at her in awe, his mouth curling into a smile.
Usopp looked from Luffy to Nami and puffed out his chest. "Well, before I joined this crew, I used to smoke all the time!" Luffy's eyes widened as his neck rotated to face Usopp.
"REALLY?!" Luffy stared in adoration as Usopp beamed, loving the attention.
"Really? Well," Sanji pulled out another cigarette and handed it to Usopp, "one more wont hurt." Usopp gulped. He kept a brave face in front of his captain, placing the stick between his lips - backwards. Sanji raised an eyebrow, the look of scepticism spread across his face.
"Oops," Usopp turned it around and rooted around in his satchel for a match. "Aww, I'm out. I'll have to do it late-.." Sanji handed him a box of matches.
The sharpshooter raised the match to his lips, holding the flame to the tip. Luffy took a breath. Usopp shut his eyes, tightly.
Nothing happened. Usopp's eyes were still shut, and Luffy was still sparkling at the sight of it all.
"Oi, Usopp. You have to suck in." Zoro perked up from the sidelines, causing a sideways glance from Nami.
"Zoro, you seem to know your stuff." The swordsman shrugged. He swung his legs around to sit up properly, and grabbed another bottle of grog.
"Who hasn't? It's no big deal anyway." He held his head back, looking at the now purple sky.
"I don't believe you, Zoro. You're not cool enough!" Luffy laughed, looking over to the now choking Usopp. He grinned, cigarette tightened between his teeth, his eyes streaming and blood shot.
"Yeah, Marimo. Prove it. Or at least take that one off Usopp, before he chokes on us." Zoro grabbed the cig from Usopp, whose eyes were still streaming, he gasped for air.
Zoro held the cigarette to his lips, and took a long breath. He shut his eyes as he inhaled, savouring the flavour. He pulled the cig away and blew the smoke from his mouth slowly.
Luffy's jaw dropped. "MY TURN, ZOROO~~!" Zoro passed the cigarette to Luffy; taking care he took hold of it properly. Luffy put the orange end in his mouth and sucked in the smoke. Coughing and spluttering, Luffy spat the cigarette into the floor, holding his throat.
Sanji laughed and took another cigarette from the box. "I told you you wouldn't like it." He lit that one and stood up, rolling his sleeves up around his elbows. "The dishes won't wash themselves. Marimo, you can dry for taking up so much of that cigarette."
Zoro used Luffy as a prop to push himself up, mumbling curse words at Sanji as he stomped towards the galley.
Still grabbing at his throat, Luffy ran after them, shouting for water. Usopp followed shortly after; shouting for ice cream instead.
Nami stretched out her legs on the deck, and looked back towards the galley door. Watching it slam shut, she leant forward and picked up the half-used, still lit cigarette from the floor. She put it to her lips and inhaled its tobacco flavour. The smoky sensation flooding her mouth as she took another breath in.
Leaning back on her hands, she blew the smoke into the sky; it mingled with her hair and disappeared into the night. Nami stubbed out the tab on the wood and flicked it into the ocean.
Licking the remaining taste of smoke from her bottom lip, she strolled back inside to solve any probable arguments that had arisen.
She knew where Sanji's secret stash of cigarettes was, anyway. |
Well done to everyone, your prizes are:
"Me" got 50 points
"Sir Leopold" got 25 points.
"Summerfrost" got 15 points.
Well done to all of you and i hope to see you enter the next competition.
Also a well done to "The funky monkey" "God" "Ashuk" "jeffu sano" "Editor" and "Angry mob" you each get 8 points. I hope to see you in the next competition too.
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I cdnuolt blveiee taht I cluod aulaclty uesdnatnrd waht I was rdanieg. The phaonmneal pweor of the hmuan mnid, aoccdrnig to a rscheearch at Cmabrigde Uinervtisy, it dseno't mtaetr in waht oerdr the ltteres in a wrod are, the olny iproamtnt tihng is taht the frsit and lsat ltteer be in the rghit pclae. The rset can be a taotl mses and you can sitll raed it whotuit a pboerlm. Tihs is bcuseae the huamn mnid deos not raed ervey lteter by istlef, but the wrod as a wlohe. Azanmig huh? yaeh and I awlyas tghuhot slpeling was ipmorantt!
fi yuo cna raed tihs, palce it in yuor siantugre.
Olny 55% of plepoe can.
lol, can you read that? xD
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Me's one was very good and I can see why he won, it was much longer than mine and I didn't read it all.
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you cheated. well, no not really. i liked them all
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Why thank you, did you enter?
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I you look at my first post you can see all the people wo entered 
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I cdnuolt blveiee taht I cluod aulaclty uesdnatnrd waht I was rdanieg. The phaonmneal pweor of the hmuan mnid, aoccdrnig to a rscheearch at Cmabrigde Uinervtisy, it dseno't mtaetr in waht oerdr the ltteres in a wrod are, the olny iproamtnt tihng is taht the frsit and lsat ltteer be in the rghit pclae. The rset can be a taotl mses and you can sitll raed it whotuit a pboerlm. Tihs is bcuseae the huamn mnid deos not raed ervey lteter by istlef, but the wrod as a wlohe. Azanmig huh? yaeh and I awlyas tghuhot slpeling was ipmorantt!
fi yuo cna raed tihs, palce it in yuor siantugre.
Olny 55% of plepoe can.
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yeah, but i didnt win, probably because it was enetered the day before it ended
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no, it was just because you didn't win It was still really good but remember i am not the only judge and there were 9 entries 
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I cdnuolt blveiee taht I cluod aulaclty uesdnatnrd waht I was rdanieg. The phaonmneal pweor of the hmuan mnid, aoccdrnig to a rscheearch at Cmabrigde Uinervtisy, it dseno't mtaetr in waht oerdr the ltteres in a wrod are, the olny iproamtnt tihng is taht the frsit and lsat ltteer be in the rghit pclae. The rset can be a taotl mses and you can sitll raed it whotuit a pboerlm. Tihs is bcuseae the huamn mnid deos not raed ervey lteter by istlef, but the wrod as a wlohe. Azanmig huh? yaeh and I awlyas tghuhot slpeling was ipmorantt!
fi yuo cna raed tihs, palce it in yuor siantugre.
Olny 55% of plepoe can.
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I'm third? thats great! thanks. Congrats to sir leopold and 'me' great job you guys (just a little long maybe  )
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no congrats to the others?
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